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Unrequited.
Oh, Apple of my eye, forbidden fruit, you know I'm starving and I'm thirsty, but the branches pull away.
Oh, rosy-red and taunting, flawless skin and flavour haunting, please I wonder now, for what sin do I pay?
Like a candle in the darkness and I like a moth to flame, do chase your sunny beams despite retreat.
Now, I fear my sun is setting and I run toward the horizon, but the quickness of your flee exceeds my feet.
Oh, locks of golden rays and ripened lips,
Why do you so deny my warm embrace?
My words do fill the sails of idle ships,
But cannot lift a feather, in your grace.
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A tad old.
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~KitsuneRedWolf Aug 20, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Very well done ^^ I love the metaphors and description. Makes my mouth water for the words. My favorite kind of poem, I bow to you.
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:iconfatkat:
Goodness!
You flatter me far too much, dear. Thank you, so! I am glad to have pleased you, and I am very honoured that you should take the time to respond.
Best wishes, friend!
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~KitsuneRedWolf Aug 21, 2009  Student Digital Artist
It's fantastic. Thank you for writing it ^^
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~Mattiello Jan 18, 2008  Professional Writer
thanks!
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:iconfatkat:
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You're welcome!
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:iconfencer-chick:
That's amazing.. *You're* amazing!!!!!!
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:iconfatkat:
Nonsense.
You're the amazing one. No arguing with that.
:heart:
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:iconfencer-chick:
*argues* =P photos, you can just take them, but poetry, your so talented!
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:iconfatkat:
NOT TRUE!
On any level.
Photos require an eye for beauty and the patience to find it. You are a brilliant poet. I just scribble.
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~Mattiello Dec 21, 2007  Professional Writer
well, i think it is safe to say that this is an instant fave. your imagery and metaphors in here are brillant. if I could, I would totally hug you!
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